The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The two pie graphs compare the proportion of hours allocated by employed adults to various activities in a certain nation in 1958 and 2008.
Overall
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, in both years, across all activities, the
time
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designated to work was the highest. Starting with 1958, for individuals in the workforce, working and sleeping had the majority of their
time
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with both recording a rate of above 30%.
This
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is followed by going out with friends or family at 19%,
then
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they spent 14% hours of the day relaxing at home and doing other interests
such
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as playing sports. The lowest
time
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drafted was 2% which was allocated to commuting to work. Turning to 2008, working and sleeping remained the largest
time
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budgeted.
However
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, the hours spent on working had increased to 42%
while
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that of sleeping fell to 25%.
Furthermore
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, the timeshare of other activities grew by nearly 5% except that appointed to other interests which rose by only 2%, and going out that dropped to 6%,
hence
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became the smallest
time
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spent.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • percentage
  • activities
  • working adults
  • summarise
  • report
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
  • time spent
  • work-related
  • leisure
  • personal care
  • travel
  • noticeable trends
  • over a period
  • devoted
  • significant changes
  • contrast
  • compare
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