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The chart below shows average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on different daily activities.

The chart below shows average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on different daily activities.
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illustrastes
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illustrates
 the average
time
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 UK
males
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 and
females
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 spend on various activities per day. It is evident that the longest
time
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spending on
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 is sleep both
males
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 and
female
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females
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,which dominates in all other daily activities,
while
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 the shortest is voluntary work and meetings. Out of these 11 species and 5 subspecies in leisure, people spending on sleep is noticeably higher in
males
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 and
females
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, at 8.04
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hour
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hours
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 and 8.18
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hour
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hours
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 respectively. The second highest is leisure, the hours
of
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males
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 spend on is 5.25, which is 0.72 higher than that of
females
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.
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the
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leisure, not only
males
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 but
also
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females
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 spend most
time
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in
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watching TV/DVD and
listen
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 to radio/music, at 2.50
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hour
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hours
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 and 2.25
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hour
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hours
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 separately.
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, except
other
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for other
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 activities that have not been exactly classified, the shortest
time
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males
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 choose to spend
is
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in
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 childcare, voluntary work and meetings, both at 0.15
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hour
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hours
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. The activity that
females
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 spend the least
time
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 on is only
woluntary
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voluntary
 and meetings, at 0.20
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hour
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hours
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.

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