The chart below shows average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on different daily activities.

The chart below shows average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on different daily activities.
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the average
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UK
males
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and
females
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spend on various activities per day. It is evident that the longest
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spending on
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is sleep both
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and
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,which dominates in all other daily activities,
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the shortest is voluntary work and meetings. Out of these 11 species and 5 subspecies in leisure, people spending on sleep is noticeably higher in
males
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and
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, at 8.04
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hour
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and 8.18
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respectively. The second highest is leisure, the hours
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males
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spend on is 5.25, which is 0.72 higher than that of
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.
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leisure, not only
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but
also
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females
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spend most
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in
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watching TV/DVD and
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to radio/music, at 2.50
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and 2.25
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separately.
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, except
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activities that have not been exactly classified, the shortest
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males
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choose to spend
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childcare, voluntary work and meetings, both at 0.15
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. The activity that
females
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spend the least
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on is only
woluntary
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voluntary
and meetings, at 0.20
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hour
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.
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