The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The bar graph illustrates the percentages of both men and
women
in
employment
in
Canada
, South
Korea
, and
Sweden
in 2005 and 2015. In 2005, males in the three countries had a higher percentage of
employment
than females, with
Sweden
having the highest hiring
rate
of 78%, followed by South
Korea
and
Canada
at 75% and 62% respectively.
Conversely
, most of the
women
at the time were not employed as the highest
employment
rate
was at 45% in
Sweden
and the lowest was in South
Korea
at 30%.
Furthermore
, most of the men in 2015 had higher hiring rates than
women
.
However
, South Koreans were the ones with the most
employment
at almost 80%,
while
Sweden
and
Canada
were at 70%.
On the other hand
,
women
had an increase in the
employment
rate
to 50% in
Canada
, 50% in
Sweden
and 35% in South
Korea
.
To conclude
, during both years, the men had higher
employment
rates than
women
did; what's more, the hiring
rate
of both genders increased from 2005 to 2015.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words women, employment, canada, korea, sweden, rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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