The bar chart given shows the Percentage of Australian man and woman in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart given shows the Percentage of Australian

male

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males

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and

famale

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females

in various

age

groups who did

regular

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a regular

the regular

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physical activity in 2010.

Overall

, it can be pointed out from the chart,

women

were the highest

while

men

were the least in

differsnt

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different

age

groups in 2010. In comparison, between

age

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ages

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15 to 24 guys were 52.8% which was the maximum

all

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for all

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the

men

’s group

age

Then

men

went down to

the

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apply

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39.5%. But

women

started to

grew

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grow

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different

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in different

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age

groups of

famele

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female

. The biggest

were

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was

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53.3% in between

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the ega

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ega

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group of 45 to 54 in 2010. It is

cleared

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clear

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from the bar chart

between

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that between

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65 and over were close to one another which they were above 46%.

In addition

lowest

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the lowest

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of the

men

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was

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39.5%,

however

women

were 47.7% at

this

time. They were

big

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a big

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difference

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between

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women

and

men

between 35 to 44

age

women

were 13% more than

men

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, women, men with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

152 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

Percentage
Age groups
Regular physical activity
Trend
Comparison
Gender difference
Proportion
Participation rate
Exercise
Physical fitness
Observation
Likely causes
Activity levels

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The bar chart given shows the Percentage of Australian man and woman in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Some people think that development in technology causes environmental problems. Other people believe that technology can solve environmental problems. Discuss both sides of the argument and then give your opinion

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