The bar chart given shows the Percentage of Australian man and woman in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart given shows the Percentage of Australian man and woman in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart given shows the Percentage of Australian
male
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males
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and
famale
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females
in various
age
groups who did
regular
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a regular
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physical activity in 2010.
Overall
, it can be pointed out from the chart,
women
were the highest
while
men
were the least in
differsnt
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different
age
groups in 2010. In comparison, between
age
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ages
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15 to 24 guys were 52.8% which was the maximum
all
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for all
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the
men
’s group
age
.
Then
men
went down to
the
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39.5%. But
women
started to
grew
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grow
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up
different
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in different
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age
groups of
famele
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female
. The biggest
were
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was
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53.3% in between
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the ega
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ega
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a
group of 45 to 54 in 2010. It is
cleared
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from the bar chart
between
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that between
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65 and over were close to one another which they were above 46%.
In addition
,
lowest
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the lowest
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of the
men
is
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was
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39.5%,
however
,
women
were 47.7% at
this
time. They were
big
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a big
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difference
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between
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women
and
men
between 35 to 44
age
women
were 13% more than
men
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, women, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Age groups
  • Regular physical activity
  • Trend
  • Comparison
  • Gender difference
  • Proportion
  • Participation rate
  • Exercise
  • Physical fitness
  • Observation
  • Likely causes
  • Activity levels
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