IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#percentage #participation #women #management #three #companies #summarise #information #features #comparisons
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The table illustrates the
percentage
Use synonyms
 of
women
Change noun form
women's
show examples
participation
Use synonyms
 in senior management in three various companies between the years 1975 and 2015. In the 20th century, the highest
percentage
Use synonyms
 was achieved by
Eldan
Use synonyms
Ltd
Use synonyms
 in 1990 at 28%. It
also
Linking Words
 achieved the lowest
participation
Use synonyms
percentage
Use synonyms
 in 1975 and 1980 at 3%.
However
Linking Words
, Finsbury
Use synonyms
Ltd
Change noun form
Ltd's
show examples
 achievement was the highest in 1975, 1980, and 1985 at 16%, 14%, and 15%. In the 21st century,
Eldan
Use synonyms
Ltd
Use synonyms
 had the highest
participation
Use synonyms
 at 64% in 2015, followed by Bamforth
Ltd
Use synonyms
 at 46% in the same year. Finsbury
Ltd
Use synonyms
 had the lowest
percentage
Use synonyms
 in 2015 at only 26%. Bamforth
Ltd
Use synonyms
 had the lowest
percentage
Use synonyms
 in 2000 at approximately 17%,
while
Linking Words
Eldan
Use synonyms
Ltd
Use synonyms
 had the highest
percentage
Use synonyms
 at 33% in the same year. In conclusion,
Eldan
Use synonyms
Ltd
Use synonyms
 had the highest
participation
Use synonyms
percentage
Use synonyms
 in 2015 and Finsbury
Ltd
Use synonyms
 had the lowest.
Submitted by riani.the2 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, participation, eldan, ltd with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: