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The graphs below show the number of medals won by the top five countries in the summer and winter Olympics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the number of medals won by the top five countries in the summer and winter Olympics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
wo
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two
 bar graphs illustrate the
highest ranking
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 medal winners of all the time in
Winter
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 and
Summer
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Olympics
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.
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 with, The
Winter
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Olympics
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 chart shows Norway with approximately 370
medals
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 with 130
gold
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, 105
silver
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 and 135
bronze
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, the United States with around 305
medals
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, 105
gold
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, 115
silver
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 and 85
bronze
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, Germany with around 240
medals
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, 95
gold
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, 80
silver
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 and 65
bronze
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. Russia with about 198
medals
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, 80
gold
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, 55
silver
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 and 63
bronze
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, and Canada with
aproximately
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approximately
 199
medals
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, 75
gold
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, 65
silver
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 and 59
bronze
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. The
Summer
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Olympics
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 graphs
shows
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show
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 the United States with over 2,500
medals
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 won, Russia with around 1,800
medals
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, Germany with approximately 1,700
medals
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, Great Britain with about 800
medals
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 and France with around 700
medals
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. In conclusion, the United States, Germany and Russia have achieved high
medal
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medals
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 in both
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the winter
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winter
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Winter
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 and
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summer
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Summer
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Olympics
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 and the number of
medals
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 awarded in the
Summer
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Olympics
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 is higher than in the
Winter
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words winter, summer, olympics, medals, gold, silver, bronze with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • medal tally
  • top-performing countries
  • notable differences
  • highlight trends
  • summer vs. winter Olympics
  • significant differences
  • overall performance
  • comparative analysis
  • dominance in events
  • athletic prowess
  • statistical comparison
  • consistency in winning
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