The graphs below show the number of medals won by the top five countries in the summer and winter Olympics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the number of medals won by the top five countries in the summer and winter Olympics.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
wo
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two
bar graphs illustrate the
highest ranking
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highest-ranking
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medal winners of all the time in
Winter
and
Summer
Olympics
.
To begin
with, The
Winter
Olympics
chart shows Norway with approximately 370
medals
with 130
gold
, 105
silver
and 135
bronze
, the United States with around 305
medals
, 105
gold
, 115
silver
and 85
bronze
, Germany with around 240
medals
, 95
gold
, 80
silver
and 65
bronze
. Russia with about 198
medals
, 80
gold
, 55
silver
and 63
bronze
, and Canada with
aproximately
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approximately
199
medals
, 75
gold
, 65
silver
and 59
bronze
. The
Summer
Olympics
graphs
shows
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show
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the United States with over 2,500
medals
won, Russia with around 1,800
medals
, Germany with approximately 1,700
medals
, Great Britain with about 800
medals
and France with around 700
medals
. In conclusion, the United States, Germany and Russia have achieved high
medal
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medals
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in both
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the winter
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winter
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Winter
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and
summer
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Summer
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Olympics
and the number of
medals
awarded in the
Summer
Olympics
is higher than in the
Winter
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Vocabulary: Replace the words winter, summer, olympics, medals, gold, silver, bronze with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • medal tally
  • top-performing countries
  • notable differences
  • highlight trends
  • summer vs. winter Olympics
  • significant differences
  • overall performance
  • comparative analysis
  • dominance in events
  • athletic prowess
  • statistical comparison
  • consistency in winning
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