The chart and table show working hour and salary for 4 different occupationa. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart and table show working hour and salary for 4 different occupationa. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparison where relevant.
The information above illustrates the different annual compensations for different jobs compared to the weekly
hours
of
work
for each of them.
overall
, we can see that almost all of them put in more than 30
hours
of
work
each
week
except for
teachers
where they're slightly under 30
hours
. As for their annual compensation, we can see that
teachers
get paid the least and police services get paid the most.
Furthermore
,
teachers
put in the least amount of
hours
per
week
and they
also
get compensated the least with 33600 annually.
On the other hand
, nurses
work
the most with more than 50
hours
a
week
but they're not the highest paid, they are only paid a little bit more than
teachers
with a 37450 annually. As for the fire service they put in slightly less than 40
hours
a
week
and they get paid the second most with 48700 a year.
Lastly
, police service
,
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puts in a little bit more
work
a
week
than
teachers
but gets paid the most with 52050 annually.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, work, week, teachers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Occupations
  • Salaries
  • Working hours
  • Average
  • Annual
  • Comparison
  • Discrepancies
  • Professions
  • Doctors
  • Teachers
  • Engineers
  • Retail workers
  • Balanced
  • High-paying
  • Low-paying
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