The chart and table show working hour and salary for 4 different occupationa. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart and table show working hour and salary for 4 different occupationa. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparison where relevant.
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The information above illustrates the different annual compensations for different jobs compared to the weekly
hours
of
work
for each of them.
overall
, we can see that almost all of them put in more than 30
hours
of
work
each
week
except for
teachers
where they're slightly under 30
hours
. As for their annual compensation, we can see that
teachers
get paid the least and police services get paid the most.
Furthermore
,
teachers
put in the least amount of
hours
per
week
and they
also
get compensated the least with 33600 annually.
On the other hand
, nurses
work
the most with more than 50
hours
a
week
but they're not the highest paid, they are only paid a little bit more than
teachers
with a 37450 annually. As for the fire service they put in slightly less than 40
hours
a
week
and they get paid the second most with 48700 a year.
Lastly
, police service
,
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puts in a little bit more
work
a
week
than
teachers
but gets paid the most with 52050 annually.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, work, week, teachers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Occupations
  • Salaries
  • Working hours
  • Average
  • Annual
  • Comparison
  • Discrepancies
  • Professions
  • Doctors
  • Teachers
  • Engineers
  • Retail workers
  • Balanced
  • High-paying
  • Low-paying
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