The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.
Presented pie carts give the difference between
energy
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the energy
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production of France in two
years
. The graphs show us the percentage of coal,
petro
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petrol
, nuclear, gas, and other
energy
productions
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production
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. In general, there was a slight change from 1995 to 2005. Coal
energy
slightly increased from 29.80% to 30.93 in five
years
. The amount of gas production improved: when it was 29.63% in 1995, in 2005 it consisted of 30.31%.
Petro
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The petrol
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sector made up the biggest change between those two
years
.
However
, it was a decline from nearly 30% to almost
one fifth
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. Nuclear and other
energy
productions
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production
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dropped to approximately the same number. The former
one
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apply
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belonged to 6.40% in 1995,
after
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and after
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five
years
it became
one tenth
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one-tenth
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. The latter production jumped from nearly
one
twentys
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per cent
to around 9%.
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