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The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The two pie charts
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 the outcomes of answers that questioned visitors to the Parkway Hotel
how
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 the visitors rated the hotel's customer service.The same questionnaire was given to hundred guests from the
year
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years
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 2005 and 2010.
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five
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 the rate of very poor was fifteen
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whereas
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thats
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that
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 to the
hotels
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 reputation down, in 2010 was 4%.
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in Excellent rated as 5
percent
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 were in 2010 they gave
almosty
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almost
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thats
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that
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14% ,but after five years they rated 39
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very
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satisfactioned
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satisfactory
.
Thirdly
,in 2005 satisfactory sector they have given
rate
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45
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percent
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 which
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is amost
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amost
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almost
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comparing
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in
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 2010.The
last
 factor is poor, in 2005 the rate was
twenty one
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percent
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that
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improvement
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 as per them.
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other
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the other
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 side was
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the totally
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totally
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 opposite with
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 downtrend
12
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%.
finnaly
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Finally
, both charts have differences in different sectors but the highest target
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 in Satisfactory which is
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 high.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • customer service
  • questionnaire
  • survey
  • respondents
  • rating scale
  • hospitality
  • customer satisfaction
  • comparison
  • data
  • trends
  • improvement
  • deterioration
  • feedback
  • service areas
  • hospitality industry
  • guest experience
  • satisfaction level
  • to rate
  • significant
  • frequency
  • percentage
  • chart
  • bar graph
  • pie chart
  • analysis
  • conclusion
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