The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
The bar six categories, from 15 to
chart
illustrates amount
of different sexes on Australian regular physical Add an article
the amount
activitiy
in 2010. Correct your spelling
activity
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The chart
break
the Change the verb form
breaks
age
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into
from
65 and over.
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apply
Overall
, females
more exercise than males
except
the Add the preposition
except for
age
between
15 to 24. Change preposition
of
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the chart
, males
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age
from
35 to 44 contribute Change preposition
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smallest
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the smallest
percent
, 39.5, which is the only feature in the Change the spelling
per cent
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below the 40% percent
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per cent
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, this
age
group's sex has the
significant gap compared Correct article usage
a
the
other Change preposition
to the
age
groups, approximately 12.5%.
In addition
, females
the age
of 45-54 and 55-64 contribute largest
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the largest
percent
of the Replace the word
percentage
chart
, 53.3% and 53% respectively. The youngest and oldest females
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female
groups
daily exercise is similar to each other, 47.7 and 47.1 respectively.
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groups'
group's
On the other hand
males
daily physical activity Change noun form
males'
male's
percent
was fluctional Replace the word
percentage
compored
to Correct your spelling
compared
females
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females'
female's
percent
. In the end, the females
and males
was
almost Change the verb form
were
have
equal Unnecessary verb
apply
percent
.Change the spelling
per cent
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