The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The pie charts provide data on the percentage of hours working adults spend on various activities changed in a particular nation between 1958 and 2008.

Overall

, most activities increased over the given period, with the exception of sleeping and going out.

In particular

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work

went up the highest from 1958 to 2008. Looking at the pie charts more closely, one can see that working rose by 9% points from 33% in 1958 to 42% in 2008, followed by travel to work, relaxing at home and other interests or playing sports.

By contrast

, sleeping dropped by 7 % point from 32% in 1958 to 25% in 2008.

Furthermore

, going out has experienced a downward trend over the 50-year period. In conclusion, all activities have fluctuated slightly over the given period.

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