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The chart and table show working hour and salary for 4 different occupationa. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart and table show working hour and salary for 4 different occupationa. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparison where relevant.
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These charts and
table
Fix the agreement mistake
tables
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 demonstrate the
hours
Use synonyms
 worked and the salary they get . It is clear from the graph that
police
Correct article usage
the police
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service
Use synonyms
 got the highest income .
according to
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 what it is shown nurses work 55
hours
Use synonyms
 per week but the teachers work the lowest
hours
Use synonyms
 30 per week .
furthermore
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 , both teachers and nurses got a close salary . the teacher gets 33,600 pounds but the nurse
get
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gets
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 37,450 . we can
also
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 note that the fire
service
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 works for thirty-nine
hours
Use synonyms
.
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however
Add a comma
however,
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 police
service
Use synonyms
 works for five
hours
Use synonyms
. The second highest salary is fire
service
Use synonyms
 , they get 48,700 pounds every year .
to sum up
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 , we could say that the fire
service
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 and police
office
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officers
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 have higher salaries than nurses and teachers

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, service with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Occupations
  • Salaries
  • Working hours
  • Average
  • Annual
  • Comparison
  • Discrepancies
  • Professions
  • Doctors
  • Teachers
  • Engineers
  • Retail workers
  • Balanced
  • High-paying
  • Low-paying
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