The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart illustrates the proportion of employers that
work
in three different sectors across four
countries
between 1980 and 2010.
Overall
, China has the most workers in the
agriculture
field,
while
the other
countries
have the most employers in the industry sector and the lowest in
agriculture
. The proportion of people who
work
in the industries had a significant rise for the
countries
that include Germany, the USA and Japan,
while
for China there has been a decrease in the
agriculture
sector. In 1980, China was
on
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at
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top of the class having 70% of
workers
Correct pronoun usage
its workers
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in
agriculture
,
while
the other
countries
had most of their workers in the industry. Meanwhile, in 2010, the industry sector had shown an upward trend for three
countries
.
For example
, in Germany, they hit their peak at 80% of people who
work
for industries,
while
the proportion of people who
work
in
agriculture
is almost 0%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words work, countries, agriculture with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • sector
  • distribution
  • dominance
  • decline
  • significant changes
  • employment
  • patterns
  • trends
  • global
  • compare
  • highlight
  • examine
  • identify
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