The table data shows the proportion of income adults and children spent on 4 common items in the United Kingdom in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
given
table chart illustrates the percentage of salary that Verb problem
apply
adults
and children
in UK
spent on common items in 2005.
Correct article usage
the UK
Overall
, adults
tend to spent
more on Wrong verb form
spend
food
, especially women who lead this
category, while
children
have the lowest proportion in the food
purchase. Children
spent
most of their Wrong verb form
spend
income
on music
, both genders prefer the
Correct article usage
apply
music
, whereas
adults
spent
not so much as Wrong verb form
spend
children
, the music
and videos areas have to lowest purchases from adults
, however
, from the children
they have the highest rankings.
Adults
women
lead the Correct word choice
and women
food
section with 39%, per total the food
category has in total 28% purchases from adults
, while
children
only spent 11% from
their Change preposition
of
income
on food
. Also
Add a comma
Also,
children
spent 41% of their income
on music
category, while
adults
spent 4% of their salary. Men and boys like to spend most of their income
on electronic equipment with over 20% per total.Submitted by annaungureanu794 on
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