The table data shows the proportion of income adults and children spent on 4 common items in the United Kingdom in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table data shows the proportion of income adults and children spent on 4 common items in the United Kingdom in 2005.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
given
Verb problem
apply
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table chart illustrates the percentage of salary that
adults
and
children
in
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
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spent on common items in 2005.
Overall
,
adults
tend to
spent
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spend
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more on
food
, especially women who lead
this
category,
while
children
have the lowest proportion in the
food
purchase.
Children
spent
Wrong verb form
spend
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most of their
income
on
music
, both genders prefer
the
Correct article usage
apply
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music
,
whereas
adults
spent
Wrong verb form
spend
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not so much as
children
, the
music
and videos areas have to lowest purchases from
adults
,
however
, from the
children
they have the highest rankings.
Adults
women
Correct word choice
and women
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lead the
food
section with 39%, per total the
food
category has in total 28% purchases from
adults
,
while
children
only spent 11%
from
Change preposition
of
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their
income
on
food
.
Also
Add a comma
Also,
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children
spent 41% of their
income
on
music
category,
while
adults
spent 4% of their salary. Men and boys like to spend most of their
income
on electronic equipment with over 20% per total.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words adults, children, food, income, music with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion of income
  • spending habits
  • significant differences
  • trends
  • necessity
  • preference
  • lifestyle
  • expenditure
  • allocate
  • consumer behavior
  • contrast
  • notably
  • on the other hand
  • account for
  • percentage of income
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