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The tables below show sales of fair trade coffee and bananas in five countries in Europe in 1999 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below show sales of fair trade coffee and bananas in five countries in Europe in 1999 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The data based on sales of
coffee
 and
bananas
 in five
Europen
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various countries given period 1994 and 2004 was illustrated in those tables.
Overall
, it is
vivid
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clear
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 from the table that, Switzerland
was
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had
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 the highest budget
while
 Denmark
was
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had
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 the lowest during a specific period. It is clear from both tables that, in the UK jumped up for
coffee
while
coffee
 started at 1.5 and increased to 20
which
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bananas
 began
1
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at 1
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improved improvement to 5.5. In comparison, Sweden
Denmark
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and Denmark
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 went up for
coffee
,
in
contrast
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bananas
 went down during a certain period.
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, Belgium took place from
the
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0.6 and jumped to 4 for
bananas
,
however
, for
coffee
 started
1
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at 1
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and moved
1.7
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to 1.7
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 between 1994 and 2oo4. In conclusion, the huge amount of increase belonged to the UK and Switzerland for sales of Fairtrade labelled
coffee
 and
bananas
 between 1994 and 2004.
Likewise
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 Danimark, Belgium and Sweden went up for
coffee
instead
 of
bananas
 Sweden and Danmark dropped off.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, bananas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "jumped" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fair trade
  • sales figures
  • significant increase/decrease
  • stable trend
  • consumer behavior
  • market trends
  • growth rate
  • consumer acceptance
  • market growth
  • increased awareness
  • consumer preferences
  • economic factors
  • implications
  • theorize
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