The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton
The line graph illustrates
us
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the percentage of tourists to England who visited four attractions in Brighton-
Art
gallery
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Gallery
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,
Pavilion
, Pier,
Festival
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and Festival
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- between 1980 and 2010 the
Pavilion
was the most popular attraction for most of the period, though its popularity declined by 2010. The
Art
Gallery
experienced a sharp drop in visitors,
while
the Pier saw a gradual increase. Meanwhile, the Festival maintained stable attendance
over
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the
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30 years. No one
loose
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lost
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the
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popularity so instantly
like
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an
Art
Gallery
and
Pavilion
between 1995 to 2000. But no one reached
to
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50% like a
Pavilion
. The
Art
Gallery
had a sharp increase at starting. In summary, the
Pavilion
was the leading attraction, though it declined in later years. The Pier's popularity rose steadily,
Festival
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the Festival
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was the most
steadily
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line in
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while
the
Art
Gallery
lost much of its appeal
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words gallery, pavilion, art with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.

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