The line chart below shows the percentage of of people in different age groups who played video games more than ten hours a week between 1984 and 2003

The line chart below shows the percentage of of people in different age groups who played video games more than ten hours a week between 1984 and 2003
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The presented line chart compares data about the proportion of
people
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who have 5 various age groups that played video games more than 10 hours per week from 2010 to 2015.
Overall
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, it was important that the number of
people
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who played games ages except the population who had between 55 and 64 years increased over the period of 5 years.
According to
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the plot, in 2010 the main group that played computer games for more than 10 hours was
people
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aged between 25 and 44 50%;
then
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this
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group reached the minimum at 40%;
however
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, in 2015, it climbed to the percentage which was the same as in the beginning.The second ones were not only
people
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from 45 to 54 but
also
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teenagers who were 16 to 24 years old
due to
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the fact they had the same number at 40% after that, the young generation went up moderately to 70% in 2015 and reached the first level,
while
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another one fell slightly to 30% and hit the lowest point;
thereafter
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, it jumped significantly to 45% in 2015. The graph shows
people
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who were middle age ( 55-64) at the start, had 25%;
moreover
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, it rose to 30 in 2012;
nevertheless
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, it declined to 5% less than in 2010 in the
last
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year.
In contrast
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, old
people
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which was the end one in 2010 had 10% after that, it peaked in 2011 at 20%. Later it reduced to the same percentage at the start of 2013;
although
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, it
finally
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, grew to nearly the same percentage as the prior one in 2015.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • trend
  • percentage
  • age group
  • consistent
  • significant
  • decline
  • increase
  • peak
  • plateau
  • demographic
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • proportion
  • level off
  • escalate
  • diminish
  • interval
  • duration
  • prevalence
  • participation
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