The line chart below shows the percentage of of people in different age groups who played video games more than ten hours a week between 1984 and 2003

The line chart below shows the percentage of of people in different age groups who played video games more than ten hours a week between 1984 and 2003
The presented line chart compares data about the proportion of
people
who have 5 various age groups that played video games more than 10 hours per week from 2010 to 2015.
Overall
, it was important that the number of
people
who played games ages except the population who had between 55 and 64 years increased over the period of 5 years.
According to
the plot, in 2010 the main group that played computer games for more than 10 hours was
people
aged between 25 and 44 50%;
then
this
group reached the minimum at 40%;
however
, in 2015, it climbed to the percentage which was the same as in the beginning.The second ones were not only
people
from 45 to 54 but
also
teenagers who were 16 to 24 years old
due to
the fact they had the same number at 40% after that, the young generation went up moderately to 70% in 2015 and reached the first level,
while
another one fell slightly to 30% and hit the lowest point;
thereafter
, it jumped significantly to 45% in 2015. The graph shows
people
who were middle age ( 55-64) at the start, had 25%;
moreover
, it rose to 30 in 2012;
nevertheless
, it declined to 5% less than in 2010 in the
last
year.
In contrast
, old
people
which was the end one in 2010 had 10% after that, it peaked in 2011 at 20%. Later it reduced to the same percentage at the start of 2013;
although
, it
finally
, grew to nearly the same percentage as the prior one in 2015.
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