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The charts below give information on the proportions of water which is used for various purposes in six countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the proportions of water which is used for various purposes in six countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The Chart display the
percentage
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 of the proportions of water in numerous
of
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apply
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countries, namely North
America
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,South
America
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,Europe,Africa,Central Asia,
South
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and South
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 Asia, in three main,
Industraial
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industrial
,Agricultural,
Domestic
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and Domestic
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. Generally speaking, the graph shows
the
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Europe have the highest
percentage
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 in industrial with 53%, rather than Central have the lowest over 5% per cent.
While
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Agricultural
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the Agricultural
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 sector
the
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is the
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 highest in Africa.
On the other hand
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,
there
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the
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 three countries have the highest
percentage
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in
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of
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the
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apply
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Agricultural
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agriculture
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 above 80%.
However
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 the domestic
have
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has
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 less rate in the six nations, rather than the Africa approximately 84% in the Agricultural. Considerably the Domestiv
leve
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level
 at 7%.
According to
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 above, North
America
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 have a second rate of the
Industraial
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Industrial
 with rate 48% and 13% in
domestic
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the domestic
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 area.
While
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that
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apply
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South
America
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 have 71% per cent in the Agricultural.
In
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addition
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addition,
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 Central Asia
have
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has
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decrease
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decreased
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 in Domestic
about
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by about
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 7%.
Overall
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 the chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the
percentage
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in
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of
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 the six
government
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governments
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 with
in
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apply
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different aspects
operations
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of operations
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 of
consumers
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consumer
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the
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apply
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water.
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