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The charts show the qualities employers and employees think are important in job seekers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The charts show the qualities employers and employees think are important in job seekers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
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The data shows five essential things for getting a job
such
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 as education, technical skills,
passsion
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passion
 and enthusiasm, work
experiece
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experience
 and references. The second data about what skill business
owner
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owners
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 searching
from
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for from
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 candidates.
Overall
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,
education
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educational
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 background is the most considerable for employers to
hired
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hire
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.
And
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An
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 organized person is the most skill
that
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apply
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mentioned in
job
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the job
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 advert out of
eight
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the eight
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 skills mentioned. It is noticeable,
39
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that 39
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%
participants
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of participants
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 said that education is the most important to apply
a
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for a
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job rather than work experience, it is only 26%.
By contrast
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, references, passion and enthusiasm
is
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are
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 the least consideration for getting hired, it is about 4% and 7% respectively.
Reffering
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Referring
 to the second data, employers are looking for organized people rather than
innovative
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innovative ones
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. It mentions 100 times more than track
record
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records
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 and
innovative
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innovation
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 under 40
thousands
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thousand
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. Communication skills,
motivated
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motivation
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 and
qualification
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qualifications
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 almost have the same amount
mentioning
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mentioned
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 in
advert
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the advert
an advert
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, it is around 60 to 63
thousands
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thousand
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.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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