The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts below delineate the employed people aged between 60 and 64 divided by gender in four distinct countries in 1970 and 2000.
Overall
, the rate of employment for males in 1970 was more than it was in 2000, indicating a declining trend in the workforce of this
generation. In contrast
, during this
period, women tended to be less employed than men.
While
men in Belgium showed a high employment rate in the workforce back in 1970, accounting for 79%, it plummeted to only 19% 20 years
later. Furthermore
, 73% of the US elderlies were employed in 1970. However
, it decreased by 18% until 2000. Moreover
, Japan had the most employed men among the others in both years
, making up 85% and 74% of the proportion respectively. 74% of Australians were occupied in 1970 but it dropped by less than half of the whole proportion.
Nevertheless
, women comprised only 8& and 7% of all employees in Belgium in these 20 years
. American female workers used to make up 36% but their population rose by 39% during this
period. Adding to that, Japanese ladies, within this
age, formed 43% of the whole population in 1970 and 40% 20 years
later. Finally
, In Australia, this
rate was 16% in 1970 whereas
it indicated a 2% rise until 2000.Submitted by abolfath50 on
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