The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The bar diagrams depict the proportions of
employment
among men and women from 60 to 64 years old in four different countries (Australia, Japan, USA, and
Belgium
). In general, the
employment
rate of both
gender
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increased among
60
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to 64 age group in the 30-year period (1970 to 2000) with two exceptions. Regarding men, all four countries saw an increase in the percentage of
employment
. For Japan, it rose from 76 to 84 in that timeframe, which is the highest comparing other nations.
Belgium
witnessed a sharp jump from 19 to 79 between 1970 and 2000. Turning to women, Japan and
Belgium
both experienced a small rise.
In contrast
to that, there was a decline in the USA and Australia over the 30-year time. Even though the job percentage in
Belgium
slightly rose from 7 to 8, it was still the lowest among others. Interestingly, the
employment
rate in the USA fell from 38 to 36 but it was the second highest in
female
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category.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment rate
  • Percentage
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Fluctuation
  • Gender disparity
  • Trend
  • Decline
  • Improvement
  • Variation
  • Noteworthy
  • Aligned
  • Comparative analysis
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