WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You've got a new job in Germany and want to improve your German. A friend of yours also went to language school last year to study German. Write a letter to your friend asking them about their experience. In your letter ⚫ give your friend your news ⚫ ask them if they would recommend the school invite them to Germany Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows:

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Dear Gagan, Hope you are doing splendidly! I'm

droping

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dropping

a line to let you know that I got a new job

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also

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and also

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need your help in language learning.

Firstly

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, you will be over the moon when you will receive my letter. I got a job

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bookkeeper

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a bookkeeper

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in Germany. As you know

this

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is my dream job and I burnt

mid-night

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midnight

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oil to get

this

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offer.

Moreover

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, I am going to join in December

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apply

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2024.

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, I'm down

into

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dumps

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the dumps

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because

this

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position

has

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a requirement to learn

their

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the

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local language. I've

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not

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enough time to search for

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the

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best school,

who

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that

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can teach me in

few

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a few

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months. But I know you have knowledge of

best

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the best

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learning places. So if you could suggest me some, it would save

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time.

Apart from

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this

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, once I

shifed

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shifted

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there, I want you to join me there. If you have

not

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objection, please join me in your upcoming vacation. We will explore the area and will celebrate your birthday during

same

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the same

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month. Hopefully, you will help me

buddy

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, buddy

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. Write me back. Best wishes, Waris

sunnytalwan065Thu Aug 01 2024

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grammar and vocabulary

There are minor grammatical errors such as "I'm droping" which should be "I'm dropping" and "I got a job of bookkeeper" which could be better phrased as "I got a job as a bookkeeper."

coherence and cohesion

Though paragraphs are used, having distinct paragraphs for the request about the language school and the invitation to visit Germany can improve clarity.

task achievement

The letter includes all the main points: congratulating on news, asking for a recommendation, and inviting the friend to Germany.

writing tone

The tone of the letter is friendly and informal, which suits writing to a friend.

6
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
20
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

181 words

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