WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You've got a new job in Germany and want to improve your German. A friend of yours also went to language school last year to study German. Write a letter to your friend asking them about their experience. In your letter ⚫ give your friend your news ⚫ ask them if they would recommend the school invite them to Germany Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows:

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Dear Gagan, Hope you are doing splendidly! I'm
droping
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dropping
a line to let you know that I got a new job
also
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and also
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need your help in language learning.
Firstly
, you will be over the moon when you will receive my letter. I got a job
of
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as
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bookkeeper
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a bookkeeper
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in Germany. As you know
this
is my dream job and I burnt
mid-night
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midnight
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oil to get
this
offer.
Moreover
, I am going to join in December
,
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apply
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2024.
However
, I'm down
into
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dumps
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the dumps
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because
this
position
has
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a requirement to learn
their
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local language. I've
no
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not
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enough time to search for
a
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the
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best school,
who
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that
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can teach me in
few
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a few
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months. But I know you have knowledge of
best
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the best
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learning places. So if you could suggest me some, it would save
my
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me
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time.
Apart from
this
, once I
shifed
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shifted
shift
there, I want you to join me there. If you have
not
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no
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objection, please join me in your upcoming vacation. We will explore the area and will celebrate your birthday during
same
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the same
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month. Hopefully, you will help me
buddy
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, buddy
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. Write me back. Best wishes, Waris
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grammar and vocabulary
There are minor grammatical errors such as "I'm droping" which should be "I'm dropping" and "I got a job of bookkeeper" which could be better phrased as "I got a job as a bookkeeper."
coherence and cohesion
Though paragraphs are used, having distinct paragraphs for the request about the language school and the invitation to visit Germany can improve clarity.
task achievement
The letter includes all the main points: congratulating on news, asking for a recommendation, and inviting the friend to Germany.
writing tone
The tone of the letter is friendly and informal, which suits writing to a friend.
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