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The line graph below shows the population size, brith rate and the death rate of England and wales from 1700 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the population size, brith rate and the death rate of England and wales from 1700 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph depicts the rate of
population
 based on million,
birth
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of birth
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 and
death
 based on per 1000 people between 1700 and 2000 simultaneously in two counties.
Overall
, it can be seen that the
population
size
 dramatically increased,
meanwhile
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death
 and
birth
 rates both had to go down.
Moreover
, at the beginning of the period, the rate of
population
size
,
birth
 and
death
 gradually rose until 1750. Afterwards, the
size
 of
population
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the population
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 declined,
at
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and at
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 the same period of time the rate of
birth
 and
death
 remained stable from 1750 to 1800. From 1800 to 2000, there was a significant growth in the
population
size
, which reached 50 million. The ratio of
birth
 and
death
 fell
repidly
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rapidly
 from 1800 to 1950,
however
,
at
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in
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 the end both went
different
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in different
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direction
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directions
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, birth, death, size with synonyms.
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