The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian people doing sports
regular
for the year 2012.
The group of individuals is separated Change the adjective
regularly
on
different Change preposition
into
ages
groups men and women.
Change the noun form
age
Moreover
, the scheme presents 6 age category
from 15 to 65 and higher. My plan for Fix the agreement mistake
categories
this
writing task is to compare presented groups, according to
the table information.
The most active men were from 15 to 24 slightly less than 53%, while
the smallest percent (39.5%) was attributed to middle-aged males aged 35â€"44 the difference is almost 14%. Also
, people under 35, according to
the chart weren't big fans of constant physical exercises
, around 42% did some Fix the agreement mistake
exercise
kinds
of Fix the agreement mistake
kind
activities
regularly.
At the same time, women in Australia were more physically active. People 35-44 years with an average of 528 and above. Fix the agreement mistake
activity
In Addition
, adults aged from 25-34 are standing at 48%. Lastly
, the teenagers aged between 15-24 have secured an average of 47%
To sum up
, I would like to say that Australian ladies were more physically fit than Australian
gentlemen. the
average difference was 5%.Capitalize word
The
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