You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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This
bar chart shows us information about the participants of an adult education centre.
Overview, the language course
is the most attended one. comes after it, the painting course
then
, the drama course
and the last
one is
, Unnecessary verb
apply
the
sculpture Correct word choice
and the
course
, all of them, women
participants are more than men
except for the sculpture course
. However
, most of the adult education centre members are Aged above 50.
To begin
with, 42% of the participants are above 50 years old , after that 26% are between the age of 40-49, then
16% are between 30-39 years old, then
11% are between 20-29 years old, lastly
5% are under the age of 20, However
, the women
are more than men
by 20 members.
Finally
, the biggest course
is the language class which contains 40 women
and 20 men
, Next is, the painting course
with 30 women
and 25 men
, and after that comes the drama course
with 20 women
and 10 men
. Last
but not least, the sculpture course
is the only course
where men
are more than women
with 10 men
and 5 women
.Submitted by mubark.s.fawaz on
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