The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The graph contains two comparisons between men and
women
aged 60 to 64 in employment
in countries in 1970 and 2000.
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