You live in a small university town. Last week ,you drove to a big city about two hours away to buy a new laptop at a good price . You worked on the laptop all week and finished writing a long assignment that is due shortly. However, this week , the laptop does not ever switch on. Write to the story. In your letter ●Tell the story where you live what happend ●explain the problem with the laptop ●state what action you would like the store to take

Dear sir or madam I am writing to express my disappointment with a
laptop
I
purchase
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from your store in Qarshi
25th
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on 25th
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December
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december
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December
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I live in Muborak a small university town and
i
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I
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made a trip to Qarshi
for buying
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to buy
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new
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a new
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laptop
I heard that there was a great
discout
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discount
and my friends
gives
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me advice that your shop is the best shop in Qarshi The first thing I would like to draw your attention to
laptop
is not working very well When I bought my
laptop
from you.It can only
worked
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for one week. I can use
this
only for one week. Now it
is not even switch
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is not even switched
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on
then
i
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I
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try
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tried
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to switch on it
a
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apply
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ten times
however
it
is still does
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not switch on I would be
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grateful
greatful
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grateful
if you could give me a full
refound
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refund
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or replace
this
laptop
with another one I look forward to your replay and resolution to my problem                    Yours faithfully Kamolov Raxmon
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task achievement
Ensure all dates are complete for clarity (e.g., '25th December' should be '25th December 2022').
coherence cohesion
Avoid repetitive sentences (e.g., 'I can use this only for one week' repeats the same idea as the previous sentence).
coherence cohesion
Ensure paragraphs contain single ideas (e.g., one paragraph could be solely about what happened and another solely about the problem with the laptop).
suitable writing tone
Use formal language and check for grammatical errors (e.g., 'amount' instead of 'quantity' and 'reply' instead of 'replay').
task achievement
You included necessary information about the purchase and subsequent problem, fulfilling the task requirement.
greeting and closing
Polite closing is appropriate for a formal letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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