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You bought a TV a week ago but when you got home you discovered it did not work properly. You called customer service to report the problem but you have not yet received any help ■introduce yourself ■explain problem ■and state what action you would like from the company

#tv #week #home #work #customer #service #report #help #■introduce #■explain #■and #action #company
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Dear Sir or Madam I am writing about the problem with
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TV
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the TV
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 which I bought
it
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apply
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on
first
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the first
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August
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of August
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 from your central store in Oxford Street. My work as
teacher
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a teacher
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 involves watching
TV
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 for searching and
learning
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 news,
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and informations
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informations
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information
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in
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per day. It was uncomfortable
due to
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TV
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the TV
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 not working well,
not to mention
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that
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sharing new ideas with my students. After a few
days
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days,
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 I started having headaches and my productivity dramatically decreased. The
TV
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 that I
have
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bought
it
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is
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LG
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an LG
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 42 model. When I bought it, I
assured
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 by the saler,
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TV
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the TV
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 was working fine. To my surprise, after I went
to
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home, it wasn't working properly.
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 I called your store about the problem two days
aga
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ago
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 nothing has been done yet. I suggest that you replace the item
which
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 the best quality and expect a reply from you as soon as possible.
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, I deserve appropriate compensation for the inconvenience caused to me . I look forward
a
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resolution to my problem .
Your
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Yours
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 faithfully Shodiyona
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task achievement
Ensure that you provide detailed and specific examples regarding the TV's malfunction to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Organize your paragraphs more effectively for enhanced readability. Consider using separate paragraphs for your introduction, problem explanation, actions requested, and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Correct minor grammatical errors and improve sentence structures for better clarity and formality.
task achievement
You have successfully introduced yourself and the problem clearly and succinctly.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear beginning, middle, and end, which makes your intentions easy to follow.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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