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The graph below shows the regional household recycling rates in the UK, France and Germany from the years 2005-2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the regional household recycling rates in the UK, France and Germany from the years 2005-2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.
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, starting with the
UK
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 , back in 2005 the
UK
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 was in the middle between
France
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 and Germany
then
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 slowly got higher
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then
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 dropped in 2009 but the drop did not
last
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 long because
overtime
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 the
UK
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 became the highest country of the three in 2015.
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, Germany in 2005 was the lowest country with only 20% but the low
rate
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 did not stop Germany from trying, with time they kept getting better rates until 2015 they got a
rate
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 really close to the
UK
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rate
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55
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% .
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,
France
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 in 2005 was the highest rated with 50%
hence
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, being the highest in 2005
France
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 sadly did not maintain the high
rate
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 and kept getting lower and lower
untill
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until
 2013
France
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 improved and started getting higher and stopped
to
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 40% in 2015.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, france, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • regional household recycling rates
  • overall trend
  • significant increase
  • steady rise
  • fluctuations
  • marginal decline
  • notable drop
  • peak
  • trough
  • comparative analysis
  • year-on-year growth
  • data patterns
  • rate of change
  • noteworthy milestones
  • disparities
  • environmental policies
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