The table shows the population ratio of females per 100 males in six different areas (Africa, Asia, Europe, North America, Central America, and Oceania) in 1995 and 2005. Summarize and report key features.

The table shows the population ratio of females per 100 males in six different areas (Africa, Asia, Europe, North America, Central America, and Oceania) in 1995 and 2005. Summarize and report key features.
The table demonstrates the numbers of women per 100 men in different countries in 1995 and 2005 .
Firstly
, Africa in 1995 had 97.8 females per
males
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male
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.
Secondly
, in 1995
a
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number
105.3 was in Asia and it is the biggest ratio of girls .
Moreover
, Europe had 89.4 girls per
boys
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and it is absolutely the smallest
namber
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number
.
In addition
, North
America
had 100.1 females per 100 men .
Also
, Central
America
had 100 and it is the same
number
of
males
. Oceania had 103.9 women per
males
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. In 2005 , Africa had
came
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up from 97.8 to 99.2 .
Besides
,
Asia
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in Asia
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in 2005 the population ratio of
femals
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females
female
had
came
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down . Europe in 2005 had
bigger
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number
than 1995 it is 92.8 . North
America
had a nice
number
96.9 . Central
America
although
had in 1995
same
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males
number
however
it
is
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changed in 2005 to 97.5 .
Finally
, Oceania had 99.8 absolutely a perfect
number
.
To conclude
, there are many areas around the world and the ratio will be different from
countrie
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country
to
countrie
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country
. Africa and Europe had
came
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come
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up and North
America
,Central
America
, Asia and
oceani
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Oceania
had
came
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come
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down .
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