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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant

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The pie charts given demonstrate many types of
energy
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 production
of
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in
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France
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 in
years
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the years
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 1995 and 2005 .
Firstly
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 , in 1995 ,
France
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 had produced 29.80% of coal .
Secondly
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 ,
France
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 had 29.63% of gas in 1995 approximately is same the
coal
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as coal
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 .
Furthermore
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 , in 1995, was
France
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 29.27% of petrol .
Moreover
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 , nuclear
in
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is
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 another type of
energy
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 and
France
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 had produced 6.40 in 1995 .
Also
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 , there are
onother
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other
 kindes of
energy
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 in
France
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 4.90% .
In addition
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 , in 2005 ,
France
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 had
high
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 level of coal actually 30.93% .
Besides
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 ,
the
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apply
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gas
one
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is one
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 of the most
types
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important types
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 of
energy
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France
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had
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apply
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produced in 2005 30.31 .
Additionally
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 ,
France
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 had produced 19.55% of petro and 10.10% of
nulcear
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nuclear
 in 2005 .
Finally
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 , in 2005
France
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 had 9.10% of other
energy
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 .
To conclude
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 ,
although
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France
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 had
a different kinds
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a different kind
different kinds
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 of
energy
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 the
percentage
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percentages
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 in
two
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the two
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 years
are
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were
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 not
same
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the same
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 .
France
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 produced huge litters and
killograms
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kilograms
 of coal
then
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 gas after that petrol .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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