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The charts below show the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other lanhuages in addition to english,in 2000 and 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comoarison where relevent.

The charts below show the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other lanhuages in addition to english,in 2000 and 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comoarison where relevent.
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The given pie charts illustrate information about the ability to speak a
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language, other than English for British students at the same university in England in the years 2000 and 2010
Overall
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, Spanish has a notable dominance in both years with 30 and 35 per
cent
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 respectively.
On the other hand
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, there is a significant decrease who are not able to speak another language, from 20 per
cent
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 to 10.
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 the data which is related to the year 2000, the percentage of students who speak German and who are able to speak two other languages was equal and had
minority
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a minority
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, by 10
percent
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per cent
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.
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, the segment of French knowledge and ability to speak
another languages
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another language
other languages
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 had
equivalent
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an equivalent
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 with
slightly
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a slightly
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 larger proportion, by 15 per
cent
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. As can be seen in the illustration which represents the date about 2010, there was a marginal change in all categories. It is obvious that the three categories had balanced at 10 per
cent
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, whilst the ability to speak Spanish and other languages proportion increased to 35 and 20 per
cent
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, respectively.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • significantly
  • increase
  • decrease
  • multilingual
  • bilingual
  • linguistic skills
  • global context
  • notable
  • trend
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