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The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts give information about the number of staff in agriculture,
industry
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, and services across
Germany
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, the
USA
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,
Japan
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, and
China
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 in 2010. Units are measured in percentage.
Overall
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, agriculture shows an upward trend,
while
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industry
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 experienced a downward trend throughout the period. The number of
workers
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 in the
industry
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sector
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initially
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 fluctuated in
Germany
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, the
USA
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, and
Japan
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, but rose in
China
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. The agriculture
sector
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 had a percentage of
workers
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 in
Germany
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 at about 2%, but there was an increase in the
USA
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 and
Japan
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 with about 3% and 5% respectively.
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, it reaches its highest point of about 65% in
China
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. The
industry
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sector
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 experienced a slight drop in number over the period, starting at 60% in
Germany
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, there was a slight decline in the
USA
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, and
Japan
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 with about 50% of staff, and the decline slowly reached a point of 40% of
workers
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 in
China
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.
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, the service
sector
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 experienced a fluctuation in the percentage of
workers
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, starting at about 50% in
Germany
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, which had a steady drop to about 46% in the
USA
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 through
Japan
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 to below 40% and rose again in
China
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 to about 51%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words industry, germany, usa, japan, china, workers, sector with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reaches" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • sector
  • distribution
  • dominance
  • decline
  • significant changes
  • employment
  • patterns
  • trends
  • global
  • compare
  • highlight
  • examine
  • identify
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