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The line graph shows the percentage of different age groups of cinema visitors in a particular country from 1978 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the percentage of different age groups of cinema visitors in a particular country from 1978 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the proportion of four different age groups in the percentage of
people
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 who visited the
cinema
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 in a particular country between 1978 and 2008.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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people
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 aged 14-24, 25-34, and 35-49 have the same trend in
cinema
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 customers over the given period,
while
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people
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 aged over 50 began to decrease from 2003 to 2008.
To begin
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 with, the percentage of
people
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 aged 14-24 that tend to watch movies in the
cinema
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 was the highest compared to other eras at 90% in 1978,
then
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 fluctuated until 1998 and remained steadily at the same percentage as in 1978 in 2003, after that, it's dropped to around 80%.
Furthermore
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, the rate of customers aged 25-34 and 35-49 were 80% and 60%, respectively and it plummeted by increasing to approximately 70% and 61%,
then
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 declined slightly to roughly 65% and 50%.
On the other hand
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, the number of
people
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 aged over 50 who visited the
cinema
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 was 40% and remained the same portion in 2003. At that time, it jumped to 50% in the next 5 years.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cinema with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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