You and your family have just come back from a holiday staying in a rented apartment overlooking the sea. The apartment was very unsatisfactory. Write a letter of complaint to the manager of the agency from which you rented the apartment. In your letter, —give details of the things that were unsatisfactory —explain the reactions of the members of your family —ask the manager what he/she is going to do about the situation
#holiday #apartment #sea #complaint #manager #agency #—give #—explain #reactions #members #—ask #situation
Dear Sir or Madam,
I'm writing to complain about
I took
an Wrong verb form
taking
apartment
for staying a holiday with my family from near the sea.
I used to rent your apartment
which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
for spending
time on vacation. Change preposition
to spend
However
, this
time accommodation
which you Correct article usage
the accommodation
recommend
Wrong verb form
recommended
me
Change preposition
to me
,
was very unsatisfactory. The first problem Remove the comma
apply
is
that the Wrong verb form
was
apartment
had not been cleaned. Everything was very messy and we pured
everywhere and wiped dust. Correct your spelling
poured
Then
I felt exhausted myself ,
so that I was going to relax a bit. But the air condition broke down, that's why I could not have a rest well
You Remove the comma
apply
explained
me that the Add the preposition
explained to
apartment
had all of facilities
for staying and relaxing. Add an article
the facilities
Hence
, I recommend my family this
accommodation for holiday
. But Correct article usage
the holiday
then
I felt very embarrassed in front of them. This
event really affected their mood and they punished me. Furthermore
, my parents
trust was lost Change to a genitive case
parent's
parents'
by
Change preposition
apply
me
and they don't believe me anymore.
My parents don't want to stay here anymore. I'm going to ask you Correct pronoun usage
apply
explain
Fix the infinitive
to explain
this
situation to them. And I demand you replace to apartment
us which is more comfortable and has all opportunities
.
I look forward to your reply and a resolution to my problem.
Yours faithfully,
Lucy.Correct article usage
the opportunities
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that minor grammatical errors and awkward phrasing are corrected to improve clarity and communication.
task achievement
Improve the clarity and professionalism of the language used to increase the effectiveness of the complaint.
task achievement
The letter covers all required points: details of the issues, family reactions, and a clear request for resolution.
greeting and closing
The ending of the letter is polite, which is appropriate for a letter of complaint.