The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart illustrates the amount of
hours
which both genders spend on leisure
time
is large for
two
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the two
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categories that are unemployed and retired.
While
employed
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the employed
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full
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full-time
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time
group has lower indicators
according to
the chart. In the two highest statuses, both men and women have similar amounts of free
time
. The jobless have more than 80
hours
, and those who
in
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are in
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retirement have slightly less than 80
hours
.
However
, when it comes to employed
part
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part-time
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time
and housewives
females
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female
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indicators are higher. Which is 43, approximately and 58, approximately, respectively.
While
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the males
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males
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male's
males'
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degree is zero. Turning to full-
time
employment status, the indicators of men and women are different than it was with unemployed and retired. Males spend almost 50
hours
, meanwhile females have less than 40
hours
of leisure
time
, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • leisure time
  • employment status
  • full-time employment
  • part-time employment
  • unemployed
  • retired
  • housewives
  • gender comparison
  • notable differences
  • allocate time
  • trend analysis
  • work-life balance
  • time management
  • societal norms
  • economic factors
  • gender-specific trends
  • employment transition
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