The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart illustrates the amount of
hours
which both genders spend on leisure time
is large for two
categories that are unemployed and retired. Correct article usage
the two
While
employed
Correct article usage
the employed
full
Add a hyphen
full-time
time
group has lower indicators according to
the chart.
In the two highest statuses, both men and women have similar amounts of free time
. The jobless have more than 80 hours
, and those who in
retirement have slightly less than 80 Add a missing verb
are in
hours
. However
, when it comes to employed part
Add a hyphen
part-time
time
and housewives females
indicators are higher. Which is 43, approximately and 58, approximately, respectively. Fix the agreement mistake
female
While
Correct article usage
the males
males
degree is zero.
Turning to full-Change noun form
male's
males'
time
employment status, the indicators of men and women are different than it was with unemployed and retired. Males spend almost 50 hours
, meanwhile females have less than 40 hours
of leisure time
, respectively.Submitted by bellovanina97 on
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