The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular phisical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparison where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular phisical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparison where relevant.
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The presented bar graph compares Australian two gender members doing regular physical activity in 2010. The units are measured in per cent.
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, it can be clearly seen that
females
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tend to be more active and take a closer look at their appearance and health in comparison with
males
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. Female members of society from 35 to 44 and 45 to 54 plateaued . Adolescents and juveniles from 15 to 24 comprised 52,8%
males
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and 47,7%
females
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. It is noticeable, that there huge difference between 45-44 individuals when men comprised 39,5%,
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women 52,5%.
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for the middle-aged group from 35 to 44 shows a prevalence of
females
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at 52,5% and
males
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at only 39,5%. 53% of Australian
females
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did habitual physical fitness,
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males
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comprised only 45,1%. In 2010 the percentage of Australian citizens remained stable among 65 and over inhabitants in senior age at 46,7% and 47,1% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words females, males with synonyms.
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