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The pie chart below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

The pie chart below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.
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The chart illustrates the comparison of
France
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France's
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 energy
producing
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production
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 in 1995 and 2005. As can be seen, there are five different types of energy. In both years the situation was almost similar, Coal and Gas were predominant over the period. In 1995, 
black
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the black
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 substance's indication was higher than others at 29.80%,
this
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 is almost three times more than the sum of the other  and the nuclear. As for gas and
petro
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petrol
,
they
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the
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 percentages roughly were
same
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the same
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. By 2005, the figures with low indication experienced significant changes, now the sum
already
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 equal to
amount
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the amount
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 of fossil fuel. The petro lost approximately 10% and predominant trends showed by charcoal and gaseous substance.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "comparison" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nuclear energy
  • Renewable energy
  • Non-renewable energy
  • Technological advancements
  • Government policy
  • Environmental policies
  • Investment in renewable technologies
  • Traditional energy sources
  • Coal usage
  • Natural gas
  • Environmental regulations
  • Energy consumption
  • Energy production levels
  • Proportion
  • Broader trends
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