The pie chart below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

The pie chart below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.
The chart illustrates the comparison of
France
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energy
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in 1995 and 2005. As can be seen, there are five different types of energy. In both years the situation was almost similar, Coal and Gas were predominant over the period. In 1995, 
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substance's indication was higher than others at 29.80%,
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is almost three times more than the sum of the other  and the nuclear. As for gas and
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petrol
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percentages roughly were
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. By 2005, the figures with low indication experienced significant changes, now the sum
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equal to
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of fossil fuel. The petro lost approximately 10% and predominant trends showed by charcoal and gaseous substance.
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