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The graphs below show the total percentage of films released in 1996 and 2000 in a certain European country, and the proportion of ticket sales. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the total percentage of films released in 1996 and 2000 in a certain European country, and the proportion of ticket sales. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first bar chart compares the proportion of
films
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 produced in a particular country in Europe,
while
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 the second gives information on the percentage of ticket
sales
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 for different genre
films
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 between 1996 and 2000.
Overall
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, it is clear that
films
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 linked with
Drama
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 were the most produced in both years,
whereas
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Comedy
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 overtook the second place.
However
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, we can notice that people enjoyed watching the
Comedy
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 media much more than other genres over the given period.
To begin
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 with, in 1996, producers released mostly
Drama
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 and
Comedy
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films
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 which consisted of respectively slightly above 25% and only 20%,
while
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 other genres were not very productive with just approximately 11 % in Fantasy
films
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 and around 6% in Romance one.
In addition
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, in 2000, the percentage of
films
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 released increased slightly in
Drama
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,
Comedy
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 and Fantasy
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respectively by around 10 %, 5% and
also
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 5%,
whereas
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 the production level of Romance
films
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 stayed the same. Let's look at the proportion of ticket
sales
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 in the cinema. We can see that in 1996, a lot of people loved to watch Comedian
films
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 which consisted of 20%,
moreover
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 in 2000, it saw a steady rise of about 3%.
Additionally
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, the percentage of Cinema ticket
sales
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 on the
Drama
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 was roughly the same in both years with only 15%. From 1996 to 2000, there was a dramatic increase in
sales
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 of the Fantasy
films
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 in the cinema from around 4% to 8% which is doubled.
However
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, the Romance
films
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 saw a decline from 5% to around 2% over a period of 4 years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, whereas, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words films, sales, drama, comedy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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