The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instruments in 2005, 2010, 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
bar
chart
illustrates 4 different types of instruments
piano
,guitar
,drums and vilolin
from 2005 to 2015.
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violin
Overall
, the number of players of the guitar
, piano
and drum increased throughout the year.
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, guitar
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guitars
guitar
was the most played instrument
,while
violin
was the least Correct article usage
the violin
instrument
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the bar
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. In 2005 most of the students played on piano
more than the other instruments
but in 2015 guitar
rocketed and the percentage and
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the piano
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guitar
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the guitar
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, those 2 instruments
drums and a violin has
the same Correct subject-verb agreement
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perfomance
and those Correct your spelling
performance
instruments
shows
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percentage on Change the article
the lowest
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.
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, guitar
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the guitar
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its
the highest percentage on Correct your spelling
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piano
is the second highest instrument
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bar, chart, instruments, piano, guitar, instrument with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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