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The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instruments in 2005, 2010, 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instruments in 2005, 2010, 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart demonstrates the ratio of pupils who play various musical instruments,
such
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 as piano,
guitar
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, drums and violin in 3 different years, particularly in 2005, 2010
as well as
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 2015.
Overall
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, the number of children playing
guitar
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 and piano dramatically increased,
while
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 a downward trend was observed in the
amount
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number
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 of violin
players
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.
In addition
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, there was only a slight growth among drum
players
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. To start,
although
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, in the beginning, the indicator for piano
players
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 was equal to 10% in 2005, after a moderate climb it reached 20% in 2010 and made up approximately 40% in 2015. The same trend was seen in the number of
guitar
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players
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, particularly the indicator went up from almost 10% in 2005 to 20% in 2010 and peaked at 40% in 2015 which was the maximum of
this
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 chart. The indicator for
guitar
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players
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 experienced only a minimal trend as it was about 5% in 2005 and constituted just below 10% in the end. It is obvious that
a
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the
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 decline was only in the
amount
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number
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 of violin
players
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 as the quantity declined from 10% in 2005 to roughly 5% in 2015.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words guitar, players with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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