IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

The line graph shows the percentage of different age groups of cinema visitors ina particular country from 1978 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the percentage of different age groups of cinema visitors ina particular country from 1978 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The line chart provides information concerning the
propurtion
Correct your spelling
proportion
 of cinema
visitors
Use synonyms
 in different
kind
Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
show examples
 of
age
Use synonyms
 groups and countries from the year 1978 to 2008. Generally speaking,it is clear to say that in 1988
number
Correct article usage
the number
show examples
 of
Use synonyms
cinima
Correct your spelling
cinema
visitors
Use synonyms
 of all different ages hit a low of over 20 .
Next,
Linking Words
moving to human beings in
age
Use synonyms
 50+ reached a high figure of
Use synonyms
cinima
Correct your spelling
cinema
visitors
Use synonyms
.
Also
Linking Words
,we can see striking similarities
of
Change preposition
between
show examples
Use synonyms
cinima
Correct your spelling
cinema
visitors
Use synonyms
wich
Correct your spelling
which
show examples
 stood at separate numbers from
age
Use synonyms
 14 to 24 and from 35 to 49.
In addition
Linking Words
, at the
age
Use synonyms
 of 50+ after the fell in increased gradually to 40 in
year
Change the article
the year
show examples
 1998.
Furthermore
Linking Words
,in the following years it levelled
of to
Change preposition
off
show examples
 in 2003 to 40
then
Linking Words
 it plunged to 50 in year 2008 .
Moreover
Linking Words
, the percentage of mankind visiting
Use synonyms
cinima
Correct your spelling
cinema
 at the
age
Use synonyms
35
Change preposition
of 35
show examples
 to 49 dropped sharply to 50 over the period .

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, age, cinima with synonyms.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: