The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The presented graph demonstrates the amount of
books
which were borrowed
in
Change preposition
from in
show examples
four disparate months in 2014 from libraries,
while
the chart illustrates the proportion of
books
, by type, over
this
period.
Overall
, fiction
books
are dominating the percentage.
In addition
, there is an erratic pattern in 3 libraries,
however
, the Ryeslip library shows a downward linear pattern.
To begin
with, the number of borrowed
books
in Sutton Wood Library was 270
books
in July.
This
number declined dramatically to 100
books
in August.
Then
, it skyrocketed in September to 300
books
.
Moreover
, West Eaton and Church Mount stood at 50
books
in June. In September the amount tripled to 150
books
in both libraries.
Finally
, Ryeslip Library borrowed
books
were 300
books
in June. After 4 months, it shows a substantial decrease to 180
books
in September.
Furthermore
, the highest proportion of borrowed
books
was Fiction by 43%. History and Science
books
were the same by 14%. Self-help
books
are 10%,
while
Biographies are double
this
percentage by 19%.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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