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The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should * GDP (Gross Domestic Product) is the total value of goods that are made and services that are provided in a country. European Health Expenditure as Percentage of Gross Domestic Product, 2002, 2007 and 2012

The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should * GDP (Gross Domestic Product) is the total value of goods that are made and services that are provided in a country. European Health Expenditure as Percentage of Gross Domestic Product, 2002, 2007 and 2012
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The given diagram provides information on the percentage of money invested into healthcare between different European countries during the given time period.
Overall
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, the highest amounts of funds spent were recorded in
Switzerland
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, with France following closely behind,
in contrast
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 to countries like
Estonia
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 and Lithuania where only a low percentage can be observed.
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, between 2002 and 2012, most countries,
such
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 as Belgium,
Estonia
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, Spain and
Switzerland
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 did not record any chances, in
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 to the others, where a slight downward or upward trend can be seen.
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, the country with the highest amount of invested funds has remained to be
Switzerland
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, reaching out
to
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over 10% in the
10 year
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10-year
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 time period, closely followed by France,
that
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which
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 reached the same numbers,
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however
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however,
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 in the year
2012
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2012,
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 a steep drop to about 9% can be observed.
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, the lowest rates have been recorded in
Estonia
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, only reaching up to 3% during the 10 years. In conclusion, the table provides useful information on the GDP regarding health expenditure, with
Switzerland
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 being in the leading position and
Estonia
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 in the
last
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 place.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words switzerland, estonia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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