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The graph shows the amount earned by graduates of different age groups in 2002. It includes those with a degree, those with a higher degree (postgraduate) and those with other qualifications. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the amount earned by graduates of different age groups in 2002. It includes those with a degree, those with a higher degree (postgraduate) and those with other qualifications. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the salary amount
by
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 3 types of graduates in eight categories in 2002.
Overall
, all employees from 21 to 41 years increased wages to 700-800 $ per week.
Bettween
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groups
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the groups
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 there was
trend
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a trend
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 in
age
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the age
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 group, all people did not depend on
degree
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their degree
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,
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and
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after 40 years, started to decrease. Regarding
to
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postgraduates, they started from 400$ in one week.
Then
, these people hit the highest point more than 800$ between all mentioned categories.
However
, in 41-60 years groups they gradually drop to almost 600 dollars. The most noticeable trend in
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first degree
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 and
others
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that
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 employees
also
 began from less than 400$. After they reached
to
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nearly 750$, but in
40
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the 40
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 and over
ages
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 group , they
fall
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 a little bit to almost 700$.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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