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The line graph below shows the consumption of 3 different types of fast food in Britain from 1970 to 1990. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The line graph below shows the consumption of 3 different types of fast food in Britain from 1970 to 1990. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The line chart provides information concerning the
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proportion
propurtion
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proportion
 of
people
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 consumption of three different types of food in Britain from the
year
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 1970 to the
year
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 1990 Generally speaking,it
clear
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is clear
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 to say that fish and chips and
hamburger
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hamburgers
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 have striking similarities
by
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from
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 the
year
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 1970 to the
year
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 1990 .
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, the percentage of people
consume
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who consume
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 pizza
kept
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dropped sharply over the following period. Moving on to the next , ever since fish and chips and
hamburger
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hamburgers
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were staying
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 unchanged over
years
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the years
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 we can see that fish and chips increased dramatically
in
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from
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 the
year
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 1985 to the
last
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 of year1990 within 500 as
hamburger
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hamburgers
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leveled
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levelled
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 off by the year1985
then
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 it
is
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climbed up the next
year
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 until the
year
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 1990 .
In addition
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, the statistics demonstrate that pizza
starting
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started
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 to suddenly decrease
by
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over
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 time and stabilized in the
year
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 1985 .
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