The charts below show the proportion of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010

The charts below show the proportion of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010
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pie chart illustrates the percentage of England students at only one university who were able to speak rather than English between 2000 and 2010. From a closer inspection of the graph, it is obvious that the amount of Spanish
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meaningfully higher than other
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followed by  another
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and no
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. In the first point of view, in 2000, the fraction of two other
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and German were equal
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other slightly above 10%.By 2010, the figure for
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had risen moderately
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%
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German
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remained the same
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, the amount of another
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and French stood at 15%.
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In 2010,
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data was unnecessary , including another
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% and the second fraction declined to 10%.
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, no other
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began at exactly 20%, and after a decade, it decreased 10%.
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, the percentage of Spanish was predominant at approximately 30% for the entire interval, and it continued until 2010 and ceased at 35%
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