The charts below show the proportion of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010

The charts below show the proportion of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010
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pie chart illustrates the percentage of England students at only one university who were able to speak rather than English between 2000 and 2010. From a closer inspection of the graph, it is obvious that the amount of Spanish
language
meaningfully higher than other
languages
followed by  another
language
and no
another
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language
. In the first point of view, in 2000, the fraction of two other
languages
and German were equal
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other slightly above 10%.By 2010, the figure for
two
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other
languages
had risen moderately
15
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%
while
German
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language
remained the same
at the end
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.
Similarly
, the amount of another
language
and French stood at 15%.
Thus
In 2010,
this
data was unnecessary , including another
language
increased
20
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% and the second fraction declined to 10%.
Additionally
, no other
languages
began at exactly 20%, and after a decade, it decreased 10%.
Furthermore
, the percentage of Spanish was predominant at approximately 30% for the entire interval, and it continued until 2010 and ceased at 35%
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