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The line graph below gives information about the rates of unemployment between 1991 and 2005 in three different countries. The table shows the percentage of men and women in the workforce in the three countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below gives information about the rates of unemployment between 1991 and 2005 in three different countries. The table shows the percentage of men and women in the workforce in the three countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph illustrates the percentage of
unemployment
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 in
three
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 different nations including
Spain
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,
Germany
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, and Italy from 1991 to 2005. The given table describes the proportion of people in the workforce divided into genders in Europe in 1991.
Overall
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, it was obvious that in the line graph,
Spain
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 saw an upward trend in the
unemployment
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rates
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,
while
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 the figures for
Germany
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 and Italy decreased and fluctuated. In the table,
men
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 were the more dominant employers than
women
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 in both
three
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countries
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. In terms of
unemployment
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rates
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, in 1991, there was about 13%
unemployment
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 in
Germany
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, making it the highest among the
three
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countries
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. Followed by Italy and
Spain
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, with respective figures standing at 8% and 4%. After six years, the rate of people who were out of work in
Germany
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 increased rapidly, from 13% to 16%. Italy and
Spain
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 had the same figures with 12% and 9% respectively. From 1999 to 2005, German and Italian unemployed worker
rates
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 underwent a decrease.
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, the proportion of unemployed
laborers
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 in
Spain
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 climbed to approximately 11%, becoming the highest in the year 2005. Regarding the employed workers,
Spain
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 had the lowest rate among the
three
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countries
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 in both genders, with 66,2% of
men
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 and 32,3% of
women
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.
However
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,
women
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 in
Germany
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 were able to work more than in two other
countries
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 with 54,4%, and
men
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 were 76,5 %. The figure for Italian
men
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 and
women
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 worker
rates
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 were 77,1% and 37,8% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment, three, spain, germany, rates, men, women, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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