WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
The chart illustrates the distribution of employees across three sectors in four
countries
for the years 1980 and 2010. It is apparent that the industrial sector consistently held the largest share of the workforce in nearly all of these
countries
during both years.
According to
what is shown in 1980 the percentage of
workers
in all the three sectors is almost the same in the four
countries
.
however
, China has a different percentage distribution agriculture presenting 70% of
workers
.
On the other hand
, Germany has almost 5 % of agricultural
workers
.
Furthermore
, in 2010 there was an increase in industry
workers
in Germany, the USA, and Japan.
Although
China had a decrease in all the three sectors. and Germany still has the highest number of industry
workers
.
To sum up
, we could say that industry worker is the future and will continue to increase. agriculture describes the practice of growing crops or raising animals.
In other words
, not all these
countries
have an agricultural environment.
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