The graph below shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in the UK ( expressed in percentage terms)

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The line graph illustrates the percentage changing sample of private access to present-day technology in

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UK households

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, the line chart represents, that all of the technology has a steady increase, only mobile phones fluctuated slightly and the trend was upward The percentage of owners

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players by 1996 was already the highest ,despite

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, it continued to evenly grow and in the next several years

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80% was reached.

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, Internet access is not as popular as CD

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, by the same year it achieved only around 40%.

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it climbed

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and started

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of 20s century. As for mobile phones,

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were fluctuated

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gradually after their introduction. Between 1998/99 and 2000/01 mobile phones

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the same popularity as home computers, but in

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mobile

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dramatical

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fluctuations and increased thrice as much.

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Topic Vocabulary:

technological advancements
digital divide
accessibility
ubiquitous computing
smart home devices
telecommunication
multi-purpose gadgets
innovation
connectivity
obsolete
trend analysis
consumer electronics
statistical data
percentile growth
demographics
chart interpretation
gadgets
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