The line chart provides information regarding the number of visitor to and from United Kingdom over two decades from 1979 to 1999 while the bar chart illustrates the country's popularity rated based on their UK visitors number.
The line chart illustrates the
number
of visitor that comes and goes from UK
between 1979 to 1999, Correct article usage
the UK
while
the graph
shows the demanded
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apply
countries
that often
visited by Add a missing verb
are often
the
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apply
UK
citizens. Overall
, the amount of visitor
has increased drastically from 1979 to 1999 and France is the most famous country to travel by Fix the agreement mistake
visitors
the
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apply
UK
residents.
In the first graph
, in 1979, the number
of traveler
who Change to a plural noun
travelers
traveled
to Change the spelling
travelled
UK
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the UK
were
only 10 Change the verb form
was
millions
. Change to singular
million
This
number
still
defeated by the Add a missing verb
is still
number
of UK
residents who traveled
Change the spelling
travelled
abroda
which Correct your spelling
abroad
amount
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amounts
slightly
over 10 Change preposition
to slightly
millions
. The Change to singular
million
populations
has steadily risen until the spike Fix the agreement mistake
population
happen
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happened
at
around 1986. After 1989, the amount continuously grew larger and peaked in 1999 with over 50 Change preposition
apply
millions
British went to trip overseas. Change to singular
million
This
was the same for the number
of foreign visitors
, despite the gap in total population, the number
of foreign tourist
who visited Change to a plural noun
tourists
UK
peaked at approximately 25 Correct article usage
the UK
millions
in 1999.
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million
Then
, the second graph
has a breakdown details
about Change preposition
of details
top
5 Correct article usage
the top
countries
that the British people often traveled
to. The most popular country was France with over 10 Wrong verb form
travel
millions
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million
UK
visitors
, followed by Spain with a bit under of
10 Change preposition
apply
millions
. After that, the Change to singular
million
last
remaining countries
were USA
(about 4 Correct article usage
the USA
millions
Change to singular
million
UK
tourists), Greece (slightly under 4 millions
), and Turkey (approximately 2,5 Change to singular
million
millions
).
In conclusion, the line Change to singular
million
graph
shows the number
of foreign citizens who visited UK
and Correct article usage
the UK
UK
residents who traveled
abroad, Change the spelling
travelled
whereas
the bar chart provides information about the most adored countries
that have been
visited by Wrong verb form
were
the
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apply
UK
visitors
in 1999. Both the number
of overseas tourists and UK
travelers
in the first chart has Change the spelling
travellers
been surged
from 1979 to 1999. Change to the active voice
surged
Accordingly
, around 10% UK
Change preposition
of UK
visitors
has
been Change the verb form
have
traveled
to France and the other 10% Change the spelling
travelled
traveled
to Spain.Change the spelling
travelled
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