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The line chart provides information regarding the number of visitor to and from United Kingdom over two decades from 1979 to 1999 while the bar chart illustrates the country's popularity rated based on their UK visitors number.

The line chart provides information regarding the number of visitor to and from United Kingdom over two decades from 1979 to 1999 while the bar chart illustrates the country's popularity rated based on their UK visitors number.
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The line chart illustrates the
number
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 of visitor that comes and goes from
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UK
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the UK
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 between 1979 to 1999,
while
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 the
graph
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 shows the
demanded
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apply
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countries
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 that
often
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are often
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 visited by
the
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apply
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UK
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 citizens.
Overall
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, the amount of
visitor
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visitors
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 has increased drastically from 1979 to 1999 and France is the most famous country to travel by
the
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apply
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UK
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 residents. In the first
graph
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, in 1979, the
number
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 of
traveler
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travelers
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 who
traveled
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travelled
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 to
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UK
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the UK
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were
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was
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 only 10
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millions
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million
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.
This
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number
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still
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is still
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 defeated by the
number
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 of
UK
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 residents who
traveled
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travelled
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abroda
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abroad
 which
amount
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amounts
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slightly
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to slightly
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 over 10
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millions
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million
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. The
populations
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population
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 has steadily risen until the spike
happen
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happened
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at
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apply
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around 1986. After 1989, the amount continuously grew larger and peaked in 1999 with over 50
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millions
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million
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 British went to trip overseas.
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 was the same for the
number
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 of foreign
visitors
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, despite the gap in total population, the
number
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 of foreign
tourist
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tourists
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 who visited
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UK
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the UK
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 peaked at approximately 25
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millions
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million
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 in 1999.
Then
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, the second
graph
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 has a breakdown
details
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of details
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 about
top
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the top
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 5
countries
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 that the British people often
traveled
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travel
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 to. The most popular country was France with over 10
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millions
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million
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UK
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visitors
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, followed by Spain with a bit under
of
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apply
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10
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millions
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million
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. After that, the
last
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 remaining
countries
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 were
USA
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the USA
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 (about 4
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millions
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million
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UK
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 tourists), Greece (slightly under 4
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millions
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million
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), and Turkey (approximately 2,5
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millions
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million
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). In conclusion, the line
graph
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 shows the
number
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 of foreign citizens who visited
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UK
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the UK
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 and
UK
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 residents who
traveled
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travelled
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 abroad,
whereas
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 the bar chart provides information about the most adored
countries
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 that
have been
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were
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 visited by
the
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apply
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UK
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visitors
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 in 1999. Both the
number
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 of overseas tourists and
UK
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travelers
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travellers
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 in the first chart has
been surged
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surged
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 from 1979 to 1999.
Accordingly
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, around 10%
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UK
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of UK
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visitors
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has
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have
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 been
traveled
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travelled
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 to France and the other 10%
traveled
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travelled
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 to Spain.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, uk, graph, countries, millions, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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